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Wow, sounds like my view heading for work in a call center..... I really liked it. very illustrative.
AWW OMG this poem is awesome!!!!! You defiantly have talent! =] good job keep it up!!! ~Jordyn
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I like it. ^^
EMo it freaks me out and i'm 11!
WOW. That was really deep. It's really good.
And I realize that there's nothing left to lose, it can't get much duller, So maybe I'll try today, Like it's splashed with some color. -sounds kind of blunt, i get the idea of taking a turn for color but maybe u should make it flow a little more after lose maybe something like, out of the two colors i only choose black and white can't get much duller so maybe i'll try today like it's splashed with some color
It's good but kind of depressing... makes you wonder what's wrong, or why it's so sad. Or at least it's that way to me
I'd shorten it a little bit. Maybe get rid of the second to last stanza. Other than that I like it. It's easy to understand. I like that it rhymes. Most poems don't rhyme anymore. I like the repetition of the line "Of black and white". That was very good. It made the poem complete. Good work.
Awww, I love it . I could see everything pictured in my head, its creative and descriptive. My favorite part is the last few lines, " like its splashed with some color" Nicee! ;-)
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