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'Spirit of the Bells" Is that a decent title for this? My windchimes make melodies from under the eaves; every bell plays its tune for a lost child. The forces of nature are strange, free and wild; they are drawn to my essence as one who still grieves. I wear my mourning garb day after day, until night supplies my shroud as I drift into dream-land, where my daughter and I make castles in sea-sand and we watch aqua waves as they crest into white. Waking is torment after such lovely dreams. It seems like just yesterday I held her small form From where ocean meets horizon comes a fell storm; tears like colossal rains fall down my face in streams. Please bring her home to me, oh spirit of windchimes; take me from this stormy place to where the sun shines.
'Spirit of the Bells" Is that a decent title for this?
A beautiful poem. I can hear the sound of the windchimes, and the emotional journey is precisely crafted and paced. Perhaps the final couplet needs a perfect rhyme to make it work even better? Overall, an impressive use of language.
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