Thread: How does my haiku poem sound?

Title: Death In The World
Darkness in the world.
Black roses surround life happiness.
Death lives in all life.
More Info. I'm turning this in to join a High school of arts do you think this is too much!!!! Could you also tell me what you think of it!!!!

You blew your haiku

5-7-5

You have 5-9-5

make the second line "black roses surround my life"
Make the last line "Death lives in us all"

I think it works better