Book title and blurb what do you think?

[Gabby Gal]

I'm 14 and English and made this small book in my spare time. It's called Your Never Alone. It's about a family with 3 children two girls and a boy, the youngest (one if the daughters called Lilly) is kidnapped (and killed but no one knows) but she talks from heaven about her brothers and sisters determination to find her kidnapper and also from their point of view too about how their lives go on yet still searching and its a for older readers and is nothing like how lovely bones is the way I see it what's your opinion?

[Jude]

It sounds a bit too much like 'The Lovely Bones' I know you say its not like it, but from your description that book came immediately to mind. However, well done for writing it, and keep writing if that is what you enjoy doing.

[emmaloo]

I think that it sounds like a good book and in the lovely bones the girl was raped and then killed and I do believe that they found the killer, the girl only had a sister and she didn't communicate with them at all. I think that it is no worse than what has gone on with the whole twilight franchise and if you think that it is a good book find a publisher don't be influenced by petty comments

[Just Another Writer]

My opinion is you not only need to learn how to correctly use "you're", you also need to learn about punctuation.