How is this Islamic poem?

[Joseph Ali bin Muhammad]

This poem is called, "Listen Here."

It is inspired by:

-- the people who still do not understand why conflict occurs and the good we can make from it if we want to

-- the people who do not understand brain chemistry mental health disorders and refuse to acknowledge their existence despite all the scientific evidence

-- the judgemental and unforgiving

-- the fitna starters and haters who need to learn to open their hearts and see everything in a new light

Here is the poem...

I would rather have no friends
Than those who do not believe
Allah loves people like me
If I drive away someone who
Is suddenly by mistake cruel
After being my friend so
In my heart I let the person in
Just a little space
Do not tell me I have no excuse
Hermaphrodite rejected
Hated and scorned from birth
Brutalized, traumatized
Often living life as a curse
Someone slipped in her Islam
To the other it resembled that abuse
Hooked into the intense pain from it
Gave already struggling brain chemistry
Gigantic negative boost
She slipped, did not mean to
I see that in the end
But brain chemistry overloaded when
She accidentally let down her friend
Correct thing to tell me
Do not give up hope
Only take vacation
From thinking about your goal
Work on other tasks Allah still has
For self and others to complete
Before I can be with one
Allah matched for me
I said I was sorry, she said sorry too
Learn things from the story
Serves us all being improved

[mehdi]

Braaaaavoooo! Its awesome Alhamdulilah!

[buttercup1232cer]

Sorry. Fail.
God is the most judgemental imaginary being there is.
Mental disorders? Please!!!! Believing in god can be considered a mental illness.

Sweetie, I am so sorry you got let down by what you feel is mental illness, but I am sure your friend is very human and you are overreacting to mental illness.

Please don't equate total evil with mental illness. That is so far from the truth! Mentallly ill are people who struggle to survive. Evil is evil.

[Growing Times..]

this sound ok.. but the other one was better..