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    "The Guest" Is this a pome, riddle, or trash?

    The Guest

    She is, by far the rudest guest
    In my lifetime I have ever entertained
    without a fore planned invitation
    nor knock on any door,
    she entered in without a sound
    ever slowly she settled in to stay
    and gingerly explored each room,
    rearranging every thing that belongs to you!
    no matter what it be, you cannot foresee
    what is next in her daily foreboding routine,
    her heart is cruel, spreading unexpected pain
    she pounces like a cat, at any hour on the clock
    and never tires to rob you of your personal dignity,
    even when you laugh at her, or cuss a bit,
    what's the very worst of her, beware!
    Age; will never offer you an R.S.V.P.

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    Good ending. This has potential but your meter needs work.

    She is, by far, my rudest guest
    that I have ever entertained
    appears without an invite
    or even knock on the door
    She enters without a sound

    I would definitely work on this more...it could be quite good in the end.

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    it's a good poem/riddle
    i never thought it was age

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    It's a poem and I really like it. I love it when there's a dual meaning or a twist at the end

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    Excellent.

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    Indeed! It's a poem/riddle...and it's excellent!
    I would have said 'cat', but that wasn' it...age, that's the worst guest of all...but, parts of that process can be squelched!

    Good Morning!

 

 

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