I wrote this poem some time ago to save birds, but didn't type it into the computer till recently. I'd like to get comments on it, but please remember, i only want nice comments! I'm twelve years old and i think that this is a very nice poem. What do you think? Please tell me!
A bird in the cage
My wings are broken,
they hang at my side,
never can i oppen them or spread them out wide,
never can i fly free like my kind
never can i experience the freedom of both body and mind!
Never the sun beeming into my eye,
never feel the sky, the earth over which i fly!
Never the fresh wind blowing thorough my wings,
never the beautiful openens of things!
Never hear the joyous songs that my fellow bird sings,
or the sound of the many songs that throught the mountains rings.
My freedom has been stolen,
my life therefore too,
all i have to do,
is sitt here and sing for you.
Stuck behind bars for the rest of my life,
stuck in a jail without a friend or wife.
Everyday just the same food to eat,
never the feeling of eath under my feet.
Stolen from Africa,
where i was born,
away from my family and friends was torn,
away from the colors, thee noises, the sounds,
away from the fruits, the nuts, the seeds and food all around.
Never feel the wind in my face,
never feel the openes and space,
never the lovely golden sunrais stroking over my back,
Never hear the friendly sounds of my friends talk, chirp and quack!
Flapping their wings about to fly up,
the plesures of the world in one goldern cup!
THe taste of Africa light on my tung,
the presure of pain and misery heavy on my lung.
The hard/heavy choking thickness of loosing a part of me,
loosing a part that is happy and free!
The deep heavy longing wishing to be free/ wishing Africa to see!....
Yet the dull listless life,
which i live in my jail,
away in the cold world all grey and all pail,
every night i just dream to be free,
and every new day my stolen/broken life glares back at me.
and whenever all day long i silently cry my heart out,
sometimes i think from missery die I'm about.
But that's what i wish, I WISH it so dear,
won't someone my prayers do hear?
I cray and i misser, i cry my hear out,
i want to beg, cry and shout!
Even though my brain is small,
and doesn't hold much,
i still year after year dream of the hot african sun's touch!
Some people believe that i can't feel a thing,
some people believe i don't care if they brake my wing,
yet i DO have feelings!
Every animal does,
no matter what kind and no matter what age,
but/yet some people don't believe for whatever reason be,
that no feelings has a bird like me!
Or maybe just caus the WANT me in a cage,
where i slowly in missery will get older and age...
and suffer and cry and misser my hall life away,
and watch how each hour passes today.
And slowly and tortures come crawling the years,
all bearing my agony, missery and dry tears...
And finally, FINALLY I'm near the end,
I see the white light and my old neck does bend.
And there in the gone land,
joy and happyness i see,
for FINALLY FINALLY, (there) i can be FREE!!!!!!!!
Pure joy and happyness floods right through me!
Soon I'll be gone, and soon i'll be dead,
soon i'll be able to rest my poor suffering head.
Soon all I'll see is just heaven and stars, soon i'll fly away from the traffic and cars!
Soon my troubled (caught/jailed) soul will leave my body,
and i wonder "who will ever cry over me?"
For all those years which i troubled and cryed,
who will cry for ME once my body has died?
The circle of life is now very clear to me,
one lives and one dies as it always will be.
Yet regardless wether one lives life a short or long,
one has to live it happy, correct and not wrong!
If i where to live in freedom for even just a year,
when i would die, i wouldn't shed a tear!
I would of lived a happy joyful free life,
would of had friends, a family and a wife!
And when death would come my way, as it will in the end,
at least a life full of happiness i'd have spend!
Yet here with the only thing to see,
are the grey bars in front of me.
(Big faces staring into my face,
no hidding place, or closed up space
only the metal of the cage round me,
nothing to do and nothing to see!)
And the grey painted walls stand all around me,
oh! if only the colors of Africa i could see!
The beautiful peaches, the fruits and the trees,
the stretch of wild jungle as far as the bird's eye sees!
And i say it again, no matter in what cage a bird might be,
EVERY BIRD WANTS TO BE FREE!!!!
So do the world a favor,
and do us one too, tell a little child about this poem,
share with it too.
Educate someone no matter how old
try to warm a heart that is cold.
Comfort a bird which is lonely and cold.
FREE your caged birds, just let them fly away!
TELL a child which wants to have some birds some day,
Tell him how lonely, and misreable it will be,
tell him how
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09-24-2009, 02:55 AM #1Cats Camille
Guest>>>A poem i wrote to save birds. Please comment!!!?
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excellent.....i lv birds!!!
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