Please help me! Need opinions on poem!?

[HPfan7]

i already know that the rhyming and structure of it is unpredictable, but what do you think about just the poem itself, and the words? Thanks in advance!

Everyone sees a happy girl,
on her way to the top of a world,
but inside I’m breaking down
from the weight of the world on my shoulders
they say she’s got it all
what more could she ask for?
but nobody knows that my heart is torn
And I just can’t let go.
you never thought, you never knew,
that I always faked a smile at you
I had already walked many miles along,
and no longer, was I strong
and now I’m close to falling down,
Because I can’t find a way to turn my life around
I want to get out of this place
and go somewhere, where my fears I can’t face
drive and drive until I run out of gas
show everyone that I can be last,
show them that I’m not perfect
and that I never was.
so take me away today,
so I can escape the pain,
so I can see an end to the rain,
someplace where I can simply, be myself.

[Amber B]

That is very nice. Alot of meaning and I feel your pain. Keep writing!