So for school I wrote a Villanelle poem. I think it sounds cheesy.



Why, of all people, must it be you whom makes me fly
What fish? I wonder, what fish? Is that Hermes I see?
You may deliver me with laughter, but it only makes me cry.

Let's run away and lie beneath the sky
A Let's collect the copper stars above and float them, gently, on the sea
Yet I lie alone beneath the night, whispering goodbye

Impenetrable glass seeps foolish dreams dry
Impenetrable glass built between you and me
For divided we live, divided we'll die.

I despise myself for thinking that I could try
I don't need you, nor petty, friendly sympathy
Trying to be romantic is like finishing Pi.

Sometimes I think, what if I wasn't shy?
What if I wasn't awkward? What can't I see?
I am another greedy shopper with one thing I can't buy

Your love. I cannot buy it, it isn't a sty
Your love is a winged cap never meant for me
If only in our friendship I was never forced to sigh.
How you are a wingless fish, and I am a tree







Sooo....yeah. Please, if there are any suggestions as to what I can fix up or change, that would be great.
Thanks!
it didnt specify if i had to repeat lines on our outline, so I guess i screwed that part up