im an 11 yera old girl who loves to draw and write. my dream is to become a poet and a writer. so i need advice and comments. is this poem good? i made it when i felt lonley and sad.

SAD

sad is the feeling when you break your leg
sad is the feeling when your almost dead
sad is the feeling when your lonley
and that's sadness you can't take away

sad is the feeling when your broken harted
sad is the feeling of loseing when never starting
sad is the feeling when your lonley
and that's sadness you can't take away

sad is the feeling when your pet died
sad is the feeling getting stung by a bee hive
sad is the feeling when your lonley
and that's sadness you can't take away

Sad is the feeling when getting a bad grade
evan though you stuided everyday
but soon you'll get a good grade
because that sadness has gone
Away