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    My English writing, check for me, correct it please.?

    here goes.


    "She managed to grab the rope, but it began to descend."


    if there is any errors (for expression or grammar), you can let me know to eliminate the errors.


    help.
    some additions here...

    a woman was falling (into a cliff) then,
    managed to grab a rope,
    but the rope began to descend...

    if possible, it would be better to use one sentence.

    and, i must put the word 'descend' into.

    My sentence might be some vague to express that she was falling.

    so, could you suggest one (or two) sentence that is more abundant and definite?

    all thanks!

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    I'm an English major. Honestly, it looks fine to me. It's grammatically correct, but personally, I wouldn't use the word "descend." I would use a more simple word like "slip" or "give." I hope this helps.

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    or `She managed to grab the rope as it began to fall`.

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    What is the context?
    It reads correctly but sounds weird.
    How about, "She managed to grab the rope as it fell."

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    I'm an English major. Honestly, it looks fine to me. It's grammatically correct, but personally, I wouldn't use the word "descend." I would use a more simple word like "slip" or "give." I hope this helps.

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    "She managed to grab the rope, but it began to descend."
    I'm assuming it's a fragment? Because if it isn't it doesn't really make sense.
    "She managed to grab the rope, but it began to descend from?."

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    What is the context?
    It reads correctly but sounds weird.
    How about, "She managed to grab the rope as it fell."

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    Good Job ... I don't think there's any errors in that.
    It's a very interesting sentence. It makes me want to read more and find out the rest and what happens next.
    The only thing that I would say to change is the word 'but' into something else like 'although'.

    I hope my answer helped in some way.

 

 

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