Poetry? Please don't be afraid of criticizing my poem?

10-27-2008, 10:51 PM

My poem is titled Caged.

trapped behind bars unseen
like a bird clipped of freedom
so much to feel
let the doors open
so I might fly
into the night
and into the dark
let me fly
with wings spread out
soaring into the stars
nothing holding me down
caged

10-27-2008, 10:56 PM

loved it!

i think imma steel it and read it in english glass...lol

10-27-2008, 10:58 PM

thats so beautiful.i wish i could write poetry like that.mine are always sappy love 1s

10-27-2008, 11:03 PM

riiiiiiiight... :-l

10-27-2008, 11:06 PM

i think it is a really great poem bravo keep writing u got it in you
good job
and this is to JPA u don't know what poetry is u keep trying to bring ppl down to ur level dude face facts everyone is better than you

10-27-2008, 11:06 PM

its pretty good,considering u're an amateur poet...am i not right?

10-27-2008, 11:08 PM

Its good it looks like having a moral behind but I think you should add more rhym to it I mean the end words of the lines should have same tone like fly,sky or something like that
although the thoughts g8